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Friday, September 24, 2004

Devices from such sources as spinach?

This otherwise interesting bit of news from today's NewsScan Daily e-newsletter is compromised by cumbersome and confusing wording in the second sentence.

SPINACH FOR YOUR CELL PHONE
A team of researchers from MIT, the University of Tennessee, and the U.S. Naval Research Laboratory has found a way using photosynthesis -- the process by which plants get energy from light beams -- to convert sunlight into energy. The new development may eventually lead to the development of new ways to power laptops, mobile phones and devices from such sources as spinach. Popeye would approve. (AP/San Jose Mercury News 23 Sep 2004, http://www.siliconvalley.com/mld/
siliconvalley/9743484.htm)

Suggested rewording: "The new development may eventually lead to using such plants as spinach to power laptops, mobile phones, and other devices."

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